Michael and Traveller, many thanks for discussion. Following your comments I reloaded the original image with a new title though
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25-Jun-2005 20:24
alexeig, I too like the original image very much. I think it really fulfilled your goal. Perhaps the title of the original image threw us off since it focused on the wheels of the rusted machine rather than on the machine in its environment. I admit that it is a tough concept to convey within the constraints I've put on titles. -Michael
Dear Alex: I'm not sure that what you say is true. The issue is complex. When I first saw the original image I felt that your should have focused on the wheel-works, the rusting cogs a little more....like most people, lets cut out the right side. But I didn't understand what you were trying to accomplish....the subject wasn't the rusting wheels, but rather wheels in an urban enviornment...in that sense it may have been a success.
This may be a language problem, a constraint imposed by the contest. I like the title, Wheels on Urban Concrete for the original image and conception. Trust yourself. Best Wishes, Traveller
Many, many thanks for detailed comments. So, the universal verdict is that my original concept does not work and I am not quite satisfied how it came out too. What I wanted to show is not just a piece of old machinery however beautiful it is but rather its place in the urban environment. Kind of a concept of a wheel. For this reason I wanted to place close to this old grand thing full of wheel withdom a more modest wheels used to propel a toddlers carriage or bicycle (I have another frame with cyclist too). Probably I need a still wider angle or make a step behind. Or, maybe a whole concept just does not work.
I may decide to reshoot this next Saturday and meanwhile I place here another picture with attempt to show the same concept. The original submission can be found here:
http://www.pbase.com/alexeig/image/45117832
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21-Jun-2005 00:58
I too have a fascination with rusted machinery and this is a grand ol' beast, nicely captured. (*) I'm in agreement that a crop just to the right of the machine might be worth a try. Only problem with that crop is what it might do to the crane in the background. Andy and I are thinking along the same lines for a title, I thought of "a cog of gears" the moment I saw this image. -Michael
Since you have requested guidance with English, I will suggest a change of title. Collective nouns take form of A ----- of -----. For this image, I would suggest A clutch of gears, (bearing in mind that clutch is already a CN for embryonic birds of various sorts.) I have a similar fascination with machinery but i'm inclined to agree with sharon, that this image requires a crop.
